Honestly, I have no right to say anything since my tags are mediocre but, to me, it looks the same as any other C4D text. Like, all C4D text on this site, are all the same. The same basic shattered/3D text. Hence, why I hate all YT backgrounds. Some have exceptions but a majority is text just like that. If that's what you were going for, then you nailed the YT text.
I know this is late, but I have been gone for a while and just looking through stuff.
It looks good to me, you did a nice job on the text and the black pieces in the text I wish were a different color.
Overall it looks good to me