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This actually something I really need help with. When making a sentence, I struggle with correctly combining sentences, how do I improve this?

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Call of Duty: Black Ops 4 has recently been leaked by Activision. Activision has claimed that the game will be World at War based.
 
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Call of Duty: Black Ops 4 has recently been leaked by Activision; they have claimed that the game will be World at War based.
 
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Call of Duty: Black Ops 4 has recently been leaked by Activision; they have claimed that the game will be World at War based.
This one was a little easier since it was an example, let's try this one.
Hearthstone's first expansion known as Goblins vs Gnomes is an example of a pack expansion. League of Explorers is an example of an adventure.
 
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This one was a little easier since it was an example, let's try this one.
Hearthstone's first expansion known as Goblins vs Gnomes is an example of a pack expansion. League of Explorers is an example of an adventure.
Hearthstone's first expansion, Goblins vs Gnomes is what is referred to as a pack expansion; League of Explorers, their second expansion is adventure based.
 
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Hearthstone's first expansion, Goblins vs Gnomes is what is referred to as a pack expansion; League of Explorers, their second expansion is adventure based.
Do you know how I can keep working on this sort of thing? It has been a struggle of mine for a while.
 
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Do you know how I can keep working on this sort of thing? It has been a struggle of mine for a while.
Just read up on how to use semicolons effectively for one. They're a useful tool.

If you noticed, I reworded the second one. Using a variety of words leaves it sounding more natural.
Read it back to yourself as you're writing and see how natural it sounds.

Read it out loud, that period is a stop, a breath of air if you will. The semicolon eliminates that and makes it more fluid.

Just keep practicing, you'll get the hang of it. I'm still getting used to semicolons as well.
 
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D Deadpool Semicolons can be useful but they can also be easily abused. In this case they're not being used incorrectly, but I think sometimes there are better options.

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Hearthstone's first expansion Goblins vs Gnomes is an example of a pack expansion, whereas League of Explorers is an adventure.

And FrostyBot, you first sentence about CoD is a good example of why you should change up your nouns. As you probably noticed, Deadpool changed the second "Activision" to "they" which makes the sentences flow a bit better. It isn't grammatically correct/incorrect eitherway, just easier to read.
 
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D Deadpool Semicolons can be useful but they can also be easily abused. In this case they're not being used incorrectly, but I think sometimes there are better options.

For instance:
Hearthstone's first expansion Goblins vs Gnomes is an example of a pack expansion, whereas League of Explorers is an adventure.

And FrostyBot, you first sentence about CoD is a good example of why you should change up your nouns. As you probably noticed, Deadpool changed the second "Activision" to "they" which makes the sentences flow a bit better. It isn't grammatically correct/incorrect eitherway, just easier to read.

Best way would be to make a massive thread on the sentence structures, which will help with members looking to improve their sentences. I don't mind making one?
 
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Best way would be to make a massive thread on the sentence structures, which will help with members looking to improve their sentences. I don't mind making one?
That feels pretty superfluous.
 
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Why's that?
Sentence structure isn't intricate enough to warrant some massive thread discussing the concept. I see sentence structure as an idea that can be simplified down to simple, complex, and compound sentences, and personally, once I discussed these things, I'm not sure if I would be able to proceed. A megathread discussing sentence structure would be difficult to construct. Though, I'm not sure what you have in mind, so feel free to throw me a PM and give me what ideas you have.
 
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